DD8HW6 Play with Sentence Variety and Style

Original:
There is an ethical consideration to think about for each type of visual, but there are seven main considerations when you put them all together. The first type of ethical issue is the accurate use of photos and visuals in general. The second is the accurate use of charts and graphs to make sure there is no misleading presentation. Therefore, it is important to make sure the chart is proportionate. The following issue is the accurate structure and style, the document has to be sure to show the most important sentences so that they are not taken out of context. The fourth issue is to present a real picture so that the visual is not altered or modified from the original on purpose to benefit the  presenter. The next is to not make distortion for emphasis, for example, the sketches need to be the relative size of the images or icons in which reflect the quantities being compared. The fifth is to present the complete picture, so the visual has all the accurate essential data without needless detail. The last issue is to make sure of accurate content, content should not be changed or information be left out in order to persuade the audience to think a certain way.

Edited:
There are six main points to consider when using each of the above visualization techniques. The first type of ethical issue is the accuracy of the material being presented. The content should not be changed or information be left out in order to persuade the audience to think a certain way. The second is to ensure the charts and graphs being presented are not misleading. The next issue is to make sure the material is not taken out of context. The fourth issue is to present a faithful representation, such that the visual is not altered or modified from the original on purpose to benefit the presenter. The next is to not make distortions for emphasis. For example, the sketches should demote the true relative size of the images or icons to which quantities are being compared. The sixth is to present the complete picture, so the visual contains all the accurate, essential data without needless detail.

I like my new draft because I made sure of the various methods used to join ideas made sense, and flowed together. I also got rid of a lot of unnecessary information by looking closely at the the joining ideas. I tried to revise my sentences so that they had more variety in them. I also looked at my punctuation patterns to make certain that they were used correctly. Finally, I like how my edited version is less passive than my original.